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Lovely Rgds Nooruddeen

this poem reminds me of the lines..'when the hurt is full words are few'.....so much of emotions expressed in these few lines....if the translation is so beautiful the original must be awesome! ! !

Yes, indeed a very pure and heart felt poem, about a compassionate love; I can only hope the narrators beloved knows his longing for her. I would believe it is inferred because she wrote the song for or about him yes?

a heartfelt poem! well expressed!

nicely written..good job..

Hi Bhaswat, Again I am not able to judge the Bengali version of this poem. I know, because my mother language is not English, that poems written in one language cannot be rendered correctly in another. This poem's style is romantic at heart, and while there is nothing wrong with being romantic, the language has moved on from that. We are now in the post modernist era. This means that expressions such as pain, heart, burn, wet eyes, utter perfection and similar have lost their evocative power as they have become common expressions. I believe poetry is the forge of language and new meanings, new metaphors, new justapositions of contrasting words must be sought in order to convey what we feel to a modern audience, to challenge, amuse and shock them. Try to rewrite it in a more biting manner, shake us, our beliefs, tell us something we do not know: what's so special about the songs you write about? Tell us why we should listen to them too. We want to know why they are so special to you and not the effects on you. If they are special we we feel the same as you. I know it is hard work but great poetry isn't easy. And don't mind the rhyme...post-modernists do not need rhyme (although it does not hurt if you manage to achieve it) . I am looking forward to read the new version. regards enea p.s. I hope I have not been too harsh...but I am really trying to help and of course this is my modest opinion. Best of luck. :))

A lovely song to read indeed!

Lovely and sweet 10++

well done my frend....beautiful written...d gal must b lucky cuz she symbolize ur poem...luv d way u put d poem 2gether... (*_*)

I like this lovely poem as well, I'll give you 10 votes, but it should get 100 votes!

very nice poem, just keep on singing her song. Good rythem. Your Friend Lynn

Beautiful and completely heart-warming.

A lovely love song dedicated to whoever she is. Beautiful lines and rhymes. Thanks

Good write............

Your words and your themes Touch my heart as the morning sun Melting into easy streams The icebergs of my pain and burn -------- lovely written poem, fine figurative language used here...well done!

wonderful poem, well written.......10+

Melting into easy streams The icebergs of my pain and burn very good translation.....i hardly speak the language though....good work 10 voted

you appear in my soul with the brilliance of a million suns...

This is nice! chosen words are fine! 10+

Very heartfelt and romantic. 10, for you. Warm regards, Sandra