Your Eyes Comments

A mesmerizing dark-chocolate concoction or chocolate orbs-very descriptive and unusual...for eyes Good

It's wonderful and I gave it 10/10! You do have a poet's eye to see things and go deeper and the literary verve to express inner feelings in poetic language. Why haven't you written any more poem after just two? Please keep writing and post in this forum so that we all can read and share your thoughts. You have beautifully described 'her' eyes in this poem. If you love her, do not do things that would upset her, so that you do not have to see the angry waves of an ocean, 'occasionally narrowing into slits'. If you long to see her more, do things as would please her. It may take a lifetime to understand and grasp the ingredients of the two states of mood, though. My very best wishes...