You Saw It Here First... Comments

I laughed out loud reading this poem. I can see the picture, outfit chase lingue and all. Brilliant. GS

Probably could, Lamont. Today's exercise was to treat the lines as 'page-turners' and let the music find itself. As for shortening it, not my thing. I like the reader to recognise discursive as discursive. Thanks for the comments.

Interesting poem, Mike. You probably could shorten it and tighten it to make more musical (I'm big on music, free verse can be just as musical as rhymed verse) but the overall trope of it is good. Your work is interesting.