Sunday, August 3, 2008

You Never Know What You Got Till It's Gone.... Comments

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She lays on her bed, thoughts flowing into her head. Thoughts of her,

thoughts of him, thoughts of what they once were. She Remembers
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Jessica Elizondo
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Ivan Donn Carswell 07 August 2008

Jessica, the final lines are the poem - if you can find a way to express the preamble in less words than the last two lines you'll have written what is the essense of a truely great poem. Rgds, Ivan

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Serenity Prayer 03 August 2008

i agree with your title. great story. its really sad though. good job. keep it up. sista. lol. lylas.

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Colm Hayes 03 August 2008

Is it the myte or the man thats loved, is loved lost ever real again, I like to hope so. Intrestings questions. Thanks for sharing.

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Hannah M 03 August 2008

Very good, but it is confusing because of how you um... formatted it.

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