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Exclusively, i like the style of ur writing. a good poem

That was a good idea and revealing all by twisting the 'mind clouds' among each other, i think you are ready to move on from your bad times, and hope you both have good time to heal hidden sores inside...all the best and i want to say, you done it very creatively, crafting this poem very well..it's nice..keep writing Ben, i thought you can create more poem and even better..thanks for inviting-Unwritten Soul

A very nice poem, the only suggestion I could make would be on the 4th line in the first stanza, the grammer could be I cease or I've ceased Keep writing and expressing your thoughts - the world is better for it. You might enjoy my latest poem Down on the Bayou?