Wednesday, August 2, 2006

You Dirty Perverts Comments

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It's your first time, you've never done this,
For him though, this is unbelievable bliss.
You put him off, trying to make an excuse,
He approaches you, it's to no use.
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Devang Gandhi
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Bri Edwards 13 February 2019

stanza 6: " lie" not " lay" but MANY people get those two verbs mixed up. & " hes smiles" ..." he smiles" #7: " perveted" U left out the " r" ..... :)))))))))) this is hilarious. and i got so turned on that i had to excuse myself (TWICE) before i finished reading it. to MyPoemList. bri (: you will be a BETTER funny poet with more proofreading.

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Preeti - is here! 05 September 2006

This is so witty, so well written. Lol, you got me with this one, and I acnnot stoplaughing! Hey You're a Gandhi...whoa whoa! Preets

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Mary-Elizabeth Conn 02 August 2006

I must say that i absolutely love this poem. It's really cleverly written and I like the style of it. Keep up the good work- i love this poem! smiling at you, :)

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Devang Gandhi

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