You Didn't Care Comments

You should be proud of yourself, Arfa. Writing poetry is a beautiful experience and I encourage you to keep writing whenever you can. May I suggest not trying to force rhymes. Sometimes you don't get the word you really want and it can take away from your true intent. Write what you feel, whether it rhymes or not and whether it follows any or no rules of meter etc... Thank you for sharing and please keep writing your thoughts Peace

You didn't care of the tears in my eyes, I kept on, I kept on making tries. I told you but you didn't care, Now at the fate, there's no need to stare..... but u did not care. my fate. because of you. you need not stare. at the end your poem becomes scary for me and sad.... do not let ourselves to be manipulated by others for their needs. be careful. thank you dear poetess. tony