Sunday, June 4, 2017

...You Beside Me.... Comments

Rating: 4.0

just tell me my dear
if i wasted the whole morning
trying to figure out
how i want to live the rest of my
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RIC BASTASA
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Jefferson Carter 04 June 2017

Ric, I rather like this, that nice off-hand first stanza dealing with such a serious subject! Your line break leaving life as a line by itself bothers me. Maybe break after rest? If you have time, check out my new website: jeffersoncarterverse.com Let me know how you like it. Thanks! Yrs, JC

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Lamar Cole 04 June 2017

Nice write. Sounds like a very nice morning.

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