Tuesday, November 18, 2008

You Are My Hope Comments

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You are my hope, you make me smile
I will stay with you for awhile
And it’s almost time for me to leave
Just like the wind blows through the trees
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Ben Kaiser
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Preston Dubey 18 November 2008

I enjoy the N'Sync reference there...baby Bye Bye Bye Bye...haha not bad though...rhyming doesnt sound fake like you see in some poems it doesnt really flow off the tongue though, and don't be afraid to use punctuation in your poems. Just because its a poem doesnt mean you dont use periods and commas like you would normally. You have a passion for writing poems, stick with it, take in any advice you receive, and keep it up bro...

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