Friday, April 4, 2008

You And I Tonight Comments

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I guess I am never the right one for you,
Yet I still am your dearest evergreen,
And now we are both facing something new,
There are still my shoulders you can always lean,
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Geovanni Leaño
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Jessel Jane Tevar Toring 18 April 2008

mmm...comment q lng, napansin q ung last 2stanzas didnt follow the rhyming scheme u first used.meron din q npancin, u used 'tonight' and then 'today', i guess u shud be consistent sometimes...but this one is wonderful...i like the feeling conveyed...

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Arthel Tagnipez 05 April 2008

haha... we can sometimes be really funny, you know? anyway... great poem. Ü

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Geovanni Leaño

Geovanni Leaño

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