Yayati 6 - Yadu Comments
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When I look back from here
I realise, I have erred.
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This contains a lesson well learned about what is earned not deserved.
We have in Indonesia de Mahabharata ancient stories too, the same mythological source. Beautifully rendered, Unnikrishnan 5 Stars full Score
It is a great feeling to understand that you enjoyed the series, Sylvia. I know that in Indonesia there is Mahabharata and Ramayanam. Might slightly different, but same in the essential. That makes your words more valuable
Spellbinding write. Very well depicted and crafted. This is how great poetry works. A reader would be able to read a wonderful story in just few lines and take a glimpse of an amazing culture. I don't have an iota of knowledge on this story but the way the brilliant Poet presented and conveyed it made me grasp the beauty of the story of Mahabharat. Brilliantly penned.
Hi Rose Marie, As I have written elsewhere, the story of Yayati is just one among thousands of stories narrated in the epic Mahabharata. But this story acquires importance as, through the story, Emperor Yayati is anointed the common ancestor to both Great Tribes (vamshas) , the tribe of Krishna, the Yadavas and the Vamsha of Kauravas &Pandavas, the Puruvamsha. And it depicts, how the ill-effects of one’s follows through generations....
The story depicts how the ill-effects of one’s follows through generations
Wonderful write and very captivating I might add. For this reason I shall continue reading. Thank you +++++10
Hi Jeanette, Thank you for reading this series. And for this wonderful comment. Obliged.
If I may add, after reading Yayati poems 1-6 I have a more complete view of this historic story. It embodies life long lessons for young and old, presently and in years to come. Overall we can all learn from the young selfless young boy whole sacrificed his youth and desired nothing in return.. And Puru gave up everything In return for nothing; Proved the legitimate son. Exchanged his youth for the wrinkles father bore. And refused the throne. As the saying goes, pride is a killer -I will take it just a little further, greed too is a killer. Your story, dear poet proves this as a fact. Thank you!
You narrated all the series very nicely....and Your all series got a perfect ten! !
Thank you Farisa. For reading the poems and grating a ten for the series.
I wish it comes true, so I can pay back at least A fraction of my debt Not just to Puru, but father too. Wow, a great effort indeed to put forth our age old values and ethics in such lucid a style. Thanks poet for this benevolent attempt.10+++ for sharing this. Subhas
Thank you Subhas. It is a pleasure to read your comment. Ever obliged.
I am so tempted to read Mahabharata again to enjoy all these stories and many others. Thanks for creating a dramatic series.
Savita, The story of Yayati is just one of the thousands of stories narrated in Mahabharata. It is said that there is nothing you can find elsewhere, which you dont find in Mahabharata. Of course, you would enjoy going back to it.
I have very much enjoyed reading these series of poems. I am looking forward to reading more of the new ones.
Mihaela, Thank you very much for reading the poems and sharing the thoughts on them. I am obliged. Please find time to read the other poems of mine too, if time permits.
I am enjoying this saga even though I know very very little about the original. - - - The throne was never mine. I was old enough to decipher The murmurs that lingered in The corridors of the palace- - - - - - - - - - - - - - - -That is very stately noble storytelling style united with the beauty of poetry. I see you have a huge and well-deserved following for this epic- -we writers are so enraptured with the what happens next of well-written stories. Thank you for spellbinding us! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! 10
Hi Susan, It is me who is spellbound by your exquisite comments. As for the following I have here, it all started from you SW. It is you who have been encouraging me all through to pen down my musings and share it on ph. So all the following belong to you. How do I express my gratitude to SW!
I read all the six Yayatis twice, story like this can always easily capture my heart, now i am hunted by 'what next', like other of your readers, i am expecting for more.
Thank Anne. The final part is my mind; but somehow, my pen is reluctant. I shall inform you as soon as I post it on ph. Thank you again.
A novel may be a mixture of fact and fiction.It is a blend of fact with imagination.Likewise our great epic Mahabharat might have some elements of truth and some are imagination.But the moral values that this great epic teaches form the very basis of Hindu religion.Your interpretation of the characters from a new angle is like a critical analysis of a poem and praiseworthy.Thanks for sharing.
Nice depiction of the story from what I gather is a unique perspective - Yayati. Like Kelly, I am not familiar with these stories, so this is my first introduction. You tell a compelling story with foreshadowing and drama. I am curious to see what happens next. And yes, you have some poetic lines in there that capture my imagination...nearly falling on one's feet and exchanging youth for the wrinkles of the father. Thanks for sharing.
Hi Pam, Thanks from the bottom of my heart. I have just tried to look at the story from the angle of each of the characters- separate view-points. Extremely happy that you enjoyed reading. Encourages me to continue. Thanks again
Great work indeed my dear poet Unni.. i remember the interpretations that the Vanaras in Ramayana represent the Dravidas, Are all these interpretations true? i think vanaras were considered as low cast. i dont know whether i am correct.. We shall take all the spiritual and inner meaning from the epic. thank you dear poet UNNI
Hi Tony, All these are interpretations. Hardly has anything to do with facts. RamayaNa itself could be a work of fiction at least partly. May be, as MT Vasudevan Nair Writes, there was an original story, where an Aaryan girl /woman was abducted by a Dravida man. And in fight that followed the Dravidan Man could have been defeated & killed. This small story, through ages becomes an epic. And, winner writes the history. Of course, the loser does not, often, live to write his version. So Rama becomes incarnation of God and Ravana, the demon. Hanuman, Sugreeva etc are low-borne vanaras. Other than the inner simple thread of story, everything might be works of fiction.
And, why the poor Sinhalese Ravan became a Rakshasa? Of course, Ravana is is sinhalese, who lived in Srilanka. Ordinary human being. He is depicted as demon with ten heads and twenty arms, to eulogise Ram's victory. To make it significant. A victory over an ordinary human is mundane. But, if the opponents are demonic, Ram's image grows as a demigod.
i always love to read your poem and this one really a great work. its not easy explain story of Mahabharat. and i m waiting for the next one.thank you for sharing with us..Yayati's story good work..
I have erred! ! Along the ways of life. Thanks for sharing this poem with us.
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