Xyris Comments

In the horticulture, I found something valuable under the grassy leaves of your poem Ahmad! Sandra would like this poem in its deep meaning.

This is a very inventive poem, Miltonian in its vocabulary rooted in flora. You do well to dedicate it to a gifted poetess, as well. - Will

Good knowlege in hotricultures.Very descriptive in words.Keep it up!

Here one can feel the poetic twenthieth-century, above all that English one, even though in my opinion the poetic twenthieth-century is very similar all around the world. In short, symbolism, and very well used. A flower come from the cold.

Apparently, you do a lot of gardening. This poem was excellent. It alludes to things mainly a gardener would know. But much poetry uses words the average person doesn't get. So it is written for those and by those who have that knowledge, which is perfectly fine. Now for specifics. 'Northern pole' - a place familiar to you; therefore slang? The North Pole of this planet? I loved 'basal aggregation.' I suggest you use a semi-colon ( ;) between 'morning' and 'in afternoon...' You mentioned 'colder wind' and 'Atlantic' - does this harken back to your Northern Pole? Is this where the poem takes place? In your line 'wake up smoothly, ' do you not mean 'wakes'? (Plural) You describe a 'misty vision.' That is true from a flower's perspective: water, dew and humidity. I would send this poem out for publication. Journals like to see 3 - 5 poems at a time, in general. This should be one of them. I gave you a 10. Kaye

I am honored by your wish to dedicate this spare, elegant poem to me. It would, I think, be beautiful in any language or culture. Thank you, Ahmad. From West Virginia to Indonesia, I send a bouquet of autumn best wishes to you. Warmest regards, Sandra