Saturday, May 20, 2017

Worry Comments

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Worry, like rocking chair
Rocks dull thoughts to and fro
Getting you nowhere
Avails no solution to the fore
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Paul Sebastian
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Jefferson Carter 20 May 2017

Paul, this poem would be a lot better if you stopped forcing rhymes which result in clumsy lines (avails no solution to the fore) . Maybe stop writing for a while and immerse yourself in some good contemporary poetry? If you have time, check out my new website: jeffersoncarterverse.com Tell me how you like it. Yrs, JC

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