Woman Comments

I clicked on this poem because I could see from the opening line quoted in your table of contents that this poem has overstated images. The word for this is overblown. There's nothing wrong with this and if you want to can just yell, Shut up! But before doing that just note how this poem overstates its case, making the speaker into a victim when she should be a contender. You have given her worthy foes but there's no contest with them, they're in the poem to represent POWER. This may have been a necessary poem for you to write; if that's the case, I apologize for being so negative. It's just that your other poems find really creative solutions in expressing strong emotion. And we always want to aim for the highest expression we're capable of discovering.

thanks a lot Beauteous Victory...this encouragement is deeply appreciated...