Friday, December 11, 2009

-wolf On The War Path- Comments

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The mighty wolf takes down his prey
It falls and he has won, uninterested he
Moves on to conquer another
His feet kick up the blood and gunpowder
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Luke Johnson 11 December 2009

You are great for a thirteen year old. Omit the last two stanzas and finish it a bit stronger and with more fluidity.

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