Without Your Love. Comments

Very nice with simple thread that worked really well.

wow nice romantic piece well done luwi!

Nice sentiments J, I like the flow and content, very good, 10 Lynda xx

A poem that scan stand on its head for you. It bounces off the page with the rhythm of its reality. A well crafted admission of the depths of love in the easy stages of verse.10.

The flowing of the words is wonderful....it's nice how without her your life would be boring and unbearable but with it the world is a rich and wonderful place to live in. Keep it up

Your love is shown and its a good job you have her or you would be a nobody with no stars....a poem from the heart regards

well placed words...with perfect rhythm...a hearfelt poem~ 10+

A wonderful piece and had you said You are and added the last line in each stanza it would have been a poem on it's own--10

John this has all the elements of a tender romantic love-poem of the first order - it is a delight to read - - keep writing and warm wishes from Fay 10

Your well placed and chosed words made the poem an enjoyable success..cheers, Patti

How dry and dull life is to him without her love, but it is sweet and bright when he feels her love's presence. Interesting piece.

It's lovely John very simple and heartfelt - flows very well. Thanks for sharing

Nice Prose my Friend, You will enjoy your Love through Life. Having Skills to express yourself in Poetry is a Gift. You have that Gift. Kind Regards Philip

This poem is perfect - full of rhyme, rhythm and heartfelt sentiment. 'Without your precious love / I’d be as hollow as a lie' is a superb simile. S :)

Beautifully written with rhyme and rhythm and with much sensitivity and purpose. I love how the last line in each stanza is not a repetition which it could be, but it changes with every stanza. 10 Love Karin

These poem sounds like songs to me...

elegantly written with feelings 10

Hi John - Love makes us use some powerful metaphores and yours display the extremes of Positivity and Negativity. The negatives are very emotive 'The empty drum' 'The keyless lock' 'The hoiiowness of a lie' 'the turfless garden'. In my experience these mataphores are very very apt - for the HOLLOWNESS one feels when the object of our love has departed 'Without your preciuos love...........' The positives are mega! V 1 The Cosmos V 2 The Hydrosphere V 3 The Atmosphere V 4 The Lithosphere & The Biosphere - In fact 'The entire World / Universe! ! ! '. This is a classically structured poem - four quatrains - excellent metre - excellent and consistent rhyme pattern and consistent repetition which makes it excellent to recite. It merits a MAX. Yours in Poetry - JOHN

I hope you gave this to your wife before you posted it, beautiful, it's everything. terry

nice combination between a repetitive verse, a simile and an extended metaphor: ''Without your precious love I’d be as hollow as a lie You’re my entire world My clouds, my wind, my sky'' wonderful lyric poem, lovely rhymes, thank you for sharing....10+++++