Winter's Heart Comments

'Life me hit again with spite'....I'd put commas around 'me'. Be well, my poet friend. I'm in living in NC now; I believe you said you lived in 'this neck of the woods'. : ) bri

'desend' of course should be 'descend'. (a simple typo to make) I think you once pointed out to me a major typo in one of my poems. I miss your 'presence' and (figuratively) your 'presents' on PH. bri : )

Darlene, is Decembers's even a 'good' word? ;) I believe you were left with a business to run and two young sons; I hope you and yours are well today. ;)

Loved this ‘heart filled with winter", but I feel how the Spring of Poetry emanates from it! Marvellous. Top score.

Sorry for your loss. May his soul rest in peace. Very heart touching poem. Can understand your pain.

Beautiful poem! love it.

stanza 4: descend...I added a 'c' stanza 6: I think add commas in last line to set off 'me'? I HOPE YOU AND YOUR KIDS (2 boys?) ARE WELL, and perhaps prospering.

My heart goes out to you x

so sad and feeling this at the moment in my life! such heartache has been captured by your words. I like this poem very much x

'For just the briefest of time we were two' - a somber reminiscence! 'Nightmare Unfair Fear Tear' - an apt ending to a well written poem.

Oh such a heartbreaking heartrending poem, u were a happy newlywed, oh no my heartfelt condolences dear. Such a memorable poem of loss and love, expressed so beautifully in love and melancholy. Oh I really feel for u. I do hope poetry will help u move on as this is a masterpiece. Kudos my friend.

An appropriate expression of sorrow on the death of the companion of marital love. Thanks for sharing.

Darlene, I first read this poem in Bri's showcase, and I was shocked and saddened. My heart goes out to you. I lost my mother at a young age, and thought I would never recover, but I did, and so will you. God bless you.

Oh Darlene, even my muse is in tears, something I have never seen before! What a cruel blow! To lose a spouse, to lose a child... can there be anything worse?

but i WILL change Mightmare to Nightmare for the showcase! :) :)

i'll bend my preference for poems of not-much-more-than 20 lines, as i've advertised for my new showcase strategy. bri :) p.s. and i'll put your Poet's Notes below your poem in the showcase. thanks.

spued..............seems to be an archaic spelling*****. spew (spjuː) vb 1. (Physiology) to eject (the contents of the stomach) involuntarily through the mouth; vomit 2. (Physiology) to spit (spittle, phlegm, etc) out of the mouth 3. (usually foll by out) to send or be sent out in a stream: flames spewed out. n something ejected from the mouth *****Also (archaic) : spue ====================================== i KNOW it seems petty to tell you about spued in a comment about a poem about your terrible tragedy. if it bothers you (my spelling note) , i'm sorry. it is from one friend to another, as life goes on. and LIFE WILL GO ON, as difficult as it may be at first! please, let me be right! ! and please seek help/counseling if you get TOO LOW/depressed. ========================================== Life me hit again with spite...............? ? ? ? this doesn't sound quite right to me, my friend. :) you use nightmare in the body of the poem, but then you end with this: Mightmare Unfair Fear Tear ....................... i think you'll see what i mean. ====================== D, i still have more of your recent messages to read. i don't know if this is the one you referred to in one message. if so, i disagree with your opinion that it is not very good. clean it up a bit and it is plenty good, though perhaps not great like some earlier poems. i hope you continue to write and share with us (esp. me) on PH. best wishes...........always, bri :) p.s. assuming you're honest in the Poet's Notes, and i have no reason to doubt you, .............. Life has again shown itself to be heartless..............yes, life can seem heartless, and it's ok to say it is. BUT it isn't always! ! ! you know you've had more than your share of heartless moments in your young life, but you've also had some very nice moments. there is plenty of time for more, many more, nice moments. chin up! smile! even if you are crying inside (and outside as well) TRY your BEST to grab ahold of whatever people offer you to help you through the tough times. please keep in touch. to MyPoemList. let me know if this is what you want in March or April showcase. now i shall read your more recent messages. bri :)

Death! ! May his soul rest in peace. Thanks for sharing this poem with us.