Saturday, December 21, 2013

Winter Gloom Comments

Rating: 5.0

The howling winds, the biting chill
Of wintry nights reign vales and hills
All songs are ceased, trees in tears
Gone are all autumnal hues and mere
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Yasmin Khan
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Dingus 17 June 2020

Is anybody here a teacher cuz I’m batta crop and paste this ting āœŠšŸ»šŸ™šŸ»

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Khalida Bano Ali 14 September 2014

Memories of summer, spring's visions For bright morns we all wish and yearn A lovely write.

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S.zaynab Kamoonpuri 07 January 2014

U paintd winter in spectacular chilly dreary scenes. I luv d poem n i also like winter since its misin here in Tz. D indian winters i hav seen is what dis made me miss. Kudos.

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Yasmin Khan 06 January 2014

@Shahzia, I'm graetful dear friend for taking time to dilate upon my babbling. I like the way you interpreted it as good critic of poetry. Such comments give life to poetry as compare to mere a few formal words. Thanks dear......... :) Yasmin

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Shahzia Batool 01 January 2014

Wait Yasmeen! first let me glean some of your adjectives + nouns! howling winds, biting chill, wintry nights, autumnal hues, wounded leaves, dreary street, Rayless moon, bleak world, Specter shadows, bare boughs, bare earth, palsied blades, Grey sunrise, bright morns, bright spark... this is what i always say, a natural poet paints a picture with the tools of grammar, i love Keats for his grammatical word-painting! the lines are 14 but with a difference with 3 couplets in the beginning and 1 is the concluding one, as the poem is unlike the octave/sestet or 3 quatrains & a couplet, but you focused on conveying your meaning through imagery, and that is impressive... so nice lines: Rayless moon peers at the bleak world Specter shadows of bare boughs on bare earth Stand palsied blades of grass and some roses shrunk Grey sunrise, days in blanket of haze cold and stern Memories of summer, spring's visions For bright morns we all wish and yearn! good job!

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Anil Kumar Panda 01 January 2014

the gloom during winter painted so beautifully.liked it.

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Valerie Dohren 31 December 2013

Think most of us are feeling the effects of Winter at this time of year - we need to keep focused on the coming Spring. A great write, and may I wish you a very Happy New Year.

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Valsa George 31 December 2013

Let us hope that the winter won't linger long and verdant spring comes soon! The biting chill and sordidness of winter is powerfully presented! ! Wish you Yasmeen, a joyous New Year of all possible blessings! !

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Noreen Carden 29 December 2013

Nice description of winter beautiful write

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Geetha Jayakumar 29 December 2013

Beautiful blanket of gloominess covering the wintery night. Loved it Yasmeen.

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Marvin Brato 27 December 2013

Nice description about winter with gloomy mood, well-penned1

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Muhammad Ali 25 December 2013

winter gloom. nice theme and nicely expressed.

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Paddy D Daly 23 December 2013

thump on my dear, thump on

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Kanav Justa 22 December 2013

Some wounded leaves scream under-feet As I tread and thump on a dreary street wow, , wonderful lines, , , , very well done, , ,

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Unwritten Soul 22 December 2013

This seasonal poetry done in very poetic view, mimicking the nature but written in paper..wonderful write Yasmeen_Soul

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Sallam Yassin 21 December 2013

gloom of winter there but in deep of heart there the hope is hidden and wait there/ bright

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Ramesh Rai 21 December 2013

I think this one is the best depiction of gloomy night. beautiful write.

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