Monday, December 2, 2013

Winter Comments

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My winter has arrived, only darkness do I see. I try to recall your voice, it would be a light for me. My summer's are no more and my spring will not be seen. I'll never have my sunshine now your not with me.

I try to turn a corner, to find a ray of light. But I only find the darkness, this nightmare that keeps me from the light. I stumbled in the darkness, my mind struggles to be free. This dark depressing feeling, just won't let me be.
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Adeline Foster 13 December 2013

These short essays are lovely and enjoyable. May I point out two common grammar slipups that are easy to overlook. ‘Arrive’ is present tense, add a ‘d’ to indicate that winter has arrived. ‘Your’ is the possessive. When using the contraction for you are not with me, it is written ‘you’re’. I hope these hints will make your essays even more enjoyable. Adeline

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