Wings And Arrows Comments

Cupid's arrow! A wonderful poem.. Top score!

I, too, am inspired by Maya Angelou and read her poetry regularly to appreciate the beautiful writing as well as the inspiration and wisdom. I was very excited to find your arrow poem...and you have two poems, posted within a day of each other that include arrows. This poem, however, has interesting layers to it. First, the writing itself, from the viewpoint of Cupid, written in a humanizing manner, as well as an omniscient narrator, and the introduction of Jove (Jupiter) who proclaims that sensual love unifies gods and humans. Then, there's the story of Cupid unifying Spring and Summer and then personifying these seasons through their representative characters (Venus and Adonis) ...and then the pulling in of Shakespeare and the concept and meaning of dying, and the idea of physical joining bonding characters in a spiritual yet pagan, secular way. Beautifully written. I think Maya Angelou would have enjoyed this poem and story.....Well crafted and imagined.

Reading your poem again, I now see that you didn't just describe Cupid and his perspective as I had said in my previous comment. You also described Venus as mature, beautiful, proud and impatient for some greater purpose. And Adonis as having an innocent allure, but always ready to kill. To me this like a sort of character set up in a novel rather then a poem, but that's what makes it so interesting and more understandable when you put them together in this love poem with the help of other gods and godesses. It is very intriguing and educational on Greek philosophy. Excellent job! -SOH

I thoght I shall start with a long poem. Got enamoured by this tale of love between Venus the Roman Goddess of love and Adonis the hunter boy, the all time archetype of beauty! Their love is given a new dimension here by comparing it to the love between Spring and Summer... the first and perhaps the best of the seasons. Venus struck by the arrows of Cupid falls for Adonis! Suddenly their lovescape becomes so colourful. They see the skies bluer, feel the fragrance of flowers sweeter, the melody of music more enchanting! What miracles Love's magic can work! Thoroughly enjoyed!

I fully enjoyed the poem upon first reading but when I read the notes about Maya, it gave an extra dimension to it and I read it again, this time still more enjoying it. Very well done, David. Excellent poetry

THERE is the possibility of a Love Match: SPRING plus SUMMER. wow!

I love the story this tells with gods and goddesses, espicially from Cupid's point of view. I like how you made him think It is as though they did not live-could not live- until I made them fall in love. That was an excellent line to me. As well as your line, Venus and Adonis, our Spring and Summer. And with such great timing too! Had this been written in the Winter it would have lost a bit of its shine. One particular line stoid out to me, when Jove was praising Cupid I'm proud of you, little god, you bring joy to both god and human alike. I love your work! (Both your poetrys work and Cupid's work, to be specific.)