Tuesday, November 4, 2014

Winged Words Comments

Rating: 5.0

Like a creature hibernating in its burrow
Waiting to come out with the first verdure of spring
The seed of a poem lay dormant in my heart
Through the long winter awaiting another spring
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Valsa George
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PREMKUMAR C N 29 November 2023

Like one lost in the doorway of his own threshold Unable to call back those winged words lost in the void. Exuberantly brilliant words of creative juxtaposition. The lost past, unwritten words lost in the void. Wow! Beautiful Poem

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Bharati Nayak 09 September 2020

I have visited this poem so many times! You have expressed so beautifully the struggle of a poet to find right words for expression.

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Kumarmani Mahakul 17 August 2020

Then another came and word after word in a row Like pellets of rain on the window pane I boiled them in the crucibles of my imagination And finally dipping them in the ocean of my emotions.......loved these lines. Much impressive with thrilling expression. Words of a poetry are so wonderfully metaphored with raindrops and ocean of emotion. This fourth hundred poem is so beautiful and heart touching. Full vote.

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Vaibhav Simha 21 April 2020

I can very well relate to this. Despite it missing rhythm, I was enraptured by the creative genius behind very medley of words. The only change I would have made (if I were the composer) is to replace the word " ocean" with " broth" , because I surmise it to be resonant with your perception of words or thoughts as cooking ingredients (as suggested by " I boiled them in the crucibles of my imagination" ;) . I am well content with this piece.

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Vaibhav Simha 22 April 2020

Typo: " every medley..."

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Valsa George 23 April 2020

Thank you Vaibhav for your appreciation! I do take your suggestion seriously! 'Broth' would have been better in the place of 'ocean'! Thanks a lot for your insight!

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Kevin Patrick 12 May 2019

It has been awhile since I read this poem, but it still conveys the truest expression of a writer, reading this (and all your work) has a symmetry of language that is perfectly shaped. Your words are wings of eagles soaring as high and long with the best Valsa. now that you have made it to over 800 I can see you soaring higher. where stars meet the sky.

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Dr Dillip K Swain 04 February 2019

Typo: Please read as 400th poem (I beg your pardon for inadvertent typographical error)

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Dr Dillip K Swain 04 February 2019

Of late I knew that it is your 400th poems submitted to this august website (from your notes) ! Congratulation! This is really a masterpiece dear madam!

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I might have kept the door open for long Alas! All my words and fancies flew away Like birds taking on wings into the sky From a cage where they were imprisoned for long . They are words that have been poured down from the heart

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kee thampi 31 December 2018

stilll remains in its beauty

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Dr Dillip K Swain 27 August 2018

I stood so helpless with my mouth shut/Staring blankly out into the airy nothing/Like one lost in the doorway of his own threshold....scintillating poetic expression! Your works are scholarly and unique! My poetic soul salutes your pen!

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Rose Marie Juan-austin 07 August 2018

A brilliant and powerful write. The use of simile enhanced the beauty of this write. Liked the last two stanzas. It resonates with me. Sometimes to prevent this from happening, every beautiful word that comes to mind must be written. Words are so elusive. They may not be able to visit us anymore. 10++++ and onto my Poem List.

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Rose Marie Juan-austin 07 August 2018

This magnificent write will find its way in every Poet's heart and soul. You have vividly portrayed the struggles of a Poet from the time he conceptualize an idea, the choice of words and the technical aspect of poetry. You have touched the intricacies of Poetry which I think a lot of people find it intimidating in Poetry. Yes, the words played a lot. It is the heartbeat of poetry.

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Mahtab Bangalee 17 July 2018

O Yes these wings are wings of Pegasus! as like as Phoenix - burned, flamed and ashed! o! but immortal flying the soul! Yes Dear Madam- these are your poetic mastermind diction- flying immortally.........

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Robert Murray Smith 19 April 2018

I love the heading on this poem and its stanzas that fly.++++++10. Robert

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Dr Dillip K Swain 18 April 2018

I stood so helpless with my mouth shut/Staring blankly out into the airy nothing….How beautifully you have placed words into the filament! A magnificent poem! This is one of your best poems! I derive a great pleasure when I delve into the intense poetic research that has gone into drafting of this beautiful poem!

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Bipasha D 09 April 2018

A brilliant poem. Each stanza is perfect. I loved your use of simile, MAGNIFICENT! ! Goes into my poemlist

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Valsa George 13 March 2018

Dillip, I am humbled! Thank you for your lovely words of appreciation!

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Dr Dillip K Swain 13 March 2018

I am delighted to learn that this is your 400th poem, a mile stone! … ‘The seed of a poem lay dormant in my heart’ has indeed grown into a great tree with lovely branches and leaves! Hope, this will provide its shade to the passersby! Many congratulations for your superb craftsmanship in yielding such magnificent pieces of poetry!

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Dr Dillip K Swain 11 March 2018

I might have kept the door open for long Alas! All my words and fancies flew away Like birds taking on wings into the sky From a cage where they were imprisoned for long....beautiful expression! A great poem! I will read it again! To MyPoemList........10

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Rini Shibu 14 February 2018

Poetry which took wings of your imagination and flew into the air for us to read...amazing piece

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