Saturday, October 24, 2015

Willy Wonka And The Bankruptcy Comments

Rating: 4.5

I'm sure you've heard the story where a young boy's dream came true
Inheriting a factory, and tiny workers, too
But ask yourself, just what would motivate a man to quit
Unless he has some knowledge he's not willing to admit?
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Bri Edwards 05 July 2016

Then Charlie caught him whizzing in the choc'late waterfall. ........oh, i see now that i already left a comment. what contest? but this tIME I will SEND TO mYpOEMlIST! BRI :)

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Bri Edwards 18 December 2015

contest? ! are there prizes? ? ? ?

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Bri Edwards 18 December 2015

Fourteener? ? [the Form] ............ sounds like the girl i'm dating now. and Chocolate Whiz would be a commercial success ..........................somewhere in outer space. I'm sure of it. Gene Wilder and that old guy i think. i don't remember the movie well, so i can't judge this poem for accuracy. nice one! ! ! tempted to send this one ALSO to MyPoemList, but you then might experience the sensation of your head swelling uncontrollably; we CAN'T HAVE THAT! bri :)

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Wes Vogler 15 November 2015

Mister Mayo, on a day that is sunny, You're silly! You're Stupid! You're funny! And what is annoying, I find you're deploying, An effortless style, on-the-money. Now I know why they say, Hold the mayo. (A cheap rhyme) I don't know what to say-o! I thought you a pimple On somebody's dimple But it seems you are here for to stay-o! (I am conserving my really, really, clever dialogue for when you decide to come after me and question my handicap.15) At this time you will undoubtedly storm to center stage, in a panama hat, roll your eyes, and try, furiously, to grow a moustache.

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Brian Mayo 15 November 2015

It seems there’s a poet named Wes Who writes with tremendous finesse But when he’s harassed He scribbles so fast The page and the pen coalesce.

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Pamela Sinicrope 25 October 2015

I've often wondered why they had those poor Oompa Loompas there... And the contest was just a ruse... FUN poem! I ❤️ Roald Dahl!

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Brian Mayo 15 November 2015

I never actually imagined the contest being a ruse. Damn that's good. It's so obvious... Pam- you are brilliant. no joke.

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