Will You Shake My Hand? Comments

Good effort! There's a lot of profound thoughts in it, and I am able to grasp the essence of your poem. I feel that if you can improve on your phrasing and usage of words, you will definately become a poet with banks of lovely poems! You have many ideas and imagery to present to the world, and I wish u all the best, that one day you'll be able to portray these and stun us, with your words. Jia you!