Will I Put The Gun To My Head Comments

4 - IN part 3 of my comment, PoemHunter caused me a problem. In part 3 of my commenting, the start to the long sentence got chopped off before submitting. i WANTED TO say i DON'T think suicide is morally wrong'! ! ! to MyPoemList bri :) but PROOFREAD! i capitalize " i" as the pronoun in my poems but usually not in comments.

3 - i love the alliterations here: " Will i wait for men to mock my misfortune" last stanza is my favorite. if there weren't so many 'typos', i'd send to MyPoemList. i still might do it. is morally wrong. it can sure solve problems for the one committing it. it can also solve problems for some left behind, but also cause problems for them. I recommend some counseling before suicide. i DON'T think you are thinking of doing it. bri ;)

2 - MORE favorites: " When formless is my life and dark my soul Will i take a bold step to take my life" i see you don't punctuate. this may work ok for this poem, but is a pain in my on some poems. you even leave apostrophe out of a contraction. " ...too harsh to bare." here you 'want' " bear" stanza 8 'needs' proofreading! and i don't know what this means: " sip shame from cups of past glories"

1- " A life without hooe.." OOPS! CREATES, not " creats" :) FEARED, not feard LOSING, not loosing. i think i used to make the same mistake! I suspect that you just need more proofreading before submitting. favorite lines so far: " What if the free air is the only thing i can afford What if i barely have a meal to feed my ownself" . use OWN SELF