Monday, September 3, 2007

Why Me Comments

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Did I choose you to be my parents
Did I choose to come to your household
As I watched the sun set and sun rise,
Day by day, wondering and lamenting
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SEGUN RASAKI
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Light Images 16 March 2008

A good way to express heartfelt feelings as one grows through time and begins to find the answers to 'why me.'... Well done in follow through of emotion and message. You've made your poem very real.... Light. (the only comment I might make is for the structure in line length... they could be shortened by making an extra line for the stanzas... again only a thought as I look back at it.)

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