Sunday, February 28, 2010

Why I Smoke Comments

Rating: 4.5

I smoke
to kill time
to create words
to relive pain
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Putholi Arumugham T
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Rajkumar Mukherjee 01 March 2010

Dear Putholi, As requested, I'm commenting on your poem 'why I smoke? ' The basic idea of the poem is the title. And you have gone to narrate it by repeatation of some words. Sometimes, this pay as an aliteration is created.or as a rhyming pattern. But, here your statement doesn't suggest anydirection save and except in last two lines, that too in negatives. Hope, you'll understand, try to use some metaphor or imageries to drive home your points, be it positive or negative. The reader will want more. Otherwise it's a good effort.Rated accordingly. Rajkumar

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