Friday, May 23, 2008

Why Do You Do This To Me? Comments

Rating: 4.0

You have invaded my mind and set up base
I wish i could run but you have already won this chase
My mind needs you to leave but my heart needs you to stay
Please, only you can put my hectic mind at bay
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Heartbeat Terrorist
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Greenwolfe 1962 02 June 2008

This is a good poem to read. It has rhyme and enough rhythm to make it worthwhile. There is quality in places and in other places it could use some revisions, but its fine. GW62

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Sasuke Uchiha 24 May 2008

i like this peom its hard to have to make someone choose but sumtyms u have to

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Catherine Rica Cosico 24 May 2008

Nice write to make a love one have a choice...Pls. try to read my poems Alone and Stay like Summer...thanks

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