Tuesday, August 25, 2009

Why? Comments

Rating: 5.0

Why does everything
always fall apart
right in front of my eyes
And all the lies that I hold inside,
...
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Tori Fleck Fournelle
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Candice Key 07 September 2009

Very good use of words expressing your feelings...It clear and very open...

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~ Jon London ~ 26 August 2009

You've expressed your feelings well Tori, there's an under tone to your words, that gives this impressive piece a great impact....keep expressing my friend...you have a gift for poetry....I like your style 10

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Shilesha Johnson 25 August 2009

and you still wonder why I have anger It's all towards my mother and my father It's all my fault they left me, because, I wasn't good enough. Why did I even try i get where you're coming from.. i have so much built up inside of me and i just try to be strong.. i try my best not to cry... and i have so much anger.. and it's towards my mother.. she was never there for me, she just left me and i always felt like it was my fault and like i was never good enough.. your'e sucha good writer... keep it up...10+

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