Saturday, November 19, 2011

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Why do i feel this way when im around you
why is it that when im around you, i dont know what to do
why cant i tear out my heart now
why cant i love a life without any emotion
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Cameron Penrose 20 November 2011

why is it that i want to die without anyone at my side why dont you want me to die, instead you want me to be by your side -these are my favorite lines contrasting the difference between mortal and immortal desires! The repetition of 'why' didn't bother me much because the questions had substance! Nicely composed!

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Crimson Love 20 November 2011

Often questions need to be asked, but its not often we get a response, we have to figure the answers out ourselves, but hope we answer correctly, this poem was brilliant. Great job! :)

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