Monday, June 8, 2009

White Roses Comments

Rating: 5.0

If I sent you white roses would you know what I meant,
There long slender stems and beautiful scent,
I see the purity of each unblemished petal,
I’m aware of the thorns sharper than metal,
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Samantha chapman
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Ellen Saunders 13 June 2009

Good work :) It does seem a little clumsy at times, (e.g. a bit overdone with 'exotic, intoxicating, rare scent') but overall, it's effective. Keep going: D i'll read some more of yours

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Eyan Desir 12 June 2009

Well writen good write

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