Thursday, July 20, 2023

Whispered Comments

Rating: 4.7

In a breeze of timid whispers
and with wary downcast eyes
the secret world was opened
to where true depth of feeling lies.
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anais vionet
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Bri Edwards 24 July 2023

ATTENTION! ! ! ! I now see the 'message symbol' is no longer an unlabeled envelope for us to ponder, but the word 'message' inside a 'space' shaped like a lying-down HOTDOG. I like it.

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Bri Edwards 24 July 2023

I don't see the purple? envelope today which I use to send a message to a poet. : ( self-protection? ? bri : )

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Bri Edwards 24 July 2023

(cont.) ** ALBEIT: 'Despite its being; although.' bri : )

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Bri Edwards 24 July 2023

(cont.) My wandering finger-'controlled' mouse accidentally clicked on 4 (four) stars. BUT that was a FINE choice albeit ** done by accident! !

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Bri Edwards 24 July 2023

Another 'problem' on PH is that once stars are voted, there is no way (which I know of) to changes ones vote. (cont.)

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Bri Edwards 24 July 2023

I espcially liked lines 5-8. The rhyming is good, but non-rhyming iines I appreciated at least as much as rhyming ones.

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Bri Edwards 24 July 2023

'true depth of feeling lies.' I 'can't help feeling' that this enters the realm of 'Poetic Gynecology', a little-known specialty among famous poets.

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Bri Edwards 24 July 2023

This is an adequate poem, unlike many of yours, anais, which are 'rambling' accounts of your socializing with friends. As a poem, I like this more; as a story, I like the rambling ones more. : )

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Bri Edwards 24 July 2023

dog days: 'noun plural The hot, sultry period of summer between early July and early September. A period of stagnation.'

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Khairul Ahsan 23 July 2023

A beautiful romantic poem. Poets listen to nature's whispers, while others only see and enjoy the sight.

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Cowboy Ron Williams 20 July 2023

I really like this one. Thanks for sharing. (And the double picture makes you twice as beautiful!)

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anais vionet 24 July 2023

OMG! I actually SEE a comment (for once) . Thanks =]

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Denis Mair 20 July 2023

'...a breeze of whispers.' I like the way things come alive in your poems. The eternal dance of veils. Mother Nature started it, because as Heraclitus says, NATURE LOVES TO HIDE (since she herself is a labyrinth) . The other half of his saying was forgotten: '...AND LOVES TO LEAP OUT OF HIDING'

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anais vionet 24 July 2023

I'm actually SEEING your comment - amazing. Thank you

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Bri Edwards 24 July 2023

Let it 'leap', Denis, as I AM PREPARED with my Buck Rogers RayGUN. : )

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