While You Weren'T Looking Comments

Most poets will agree with this formula to instant success in poetry. Have a singular clear simple thought and drive it home with a repeated line. Hopefully one of uniqueness and merit. This line is not unique but it is meritorious. The formula is sound and does work here. The writing contained a bit of determined emotion that was communicated to the reader. This adds to the poems quality. Again, nothing special, but nothing to lessen the poem. A 9. GW62