Saturday, October 3, 2015

Where Are The Words? Comments

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I wish I could scream the things that occupy my mind
paint or exhale the visions of horror and beauty which simultaneously reside there
But I can’t
There is nothing here
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Leah Ayliffe
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Daniel Brick 05 October 2015

I read this poem the first time over 90 minutes ago but wasn't ready to comment on it. I've read it three more times, and decided just now to stop stalling. I won't say anything as trivial as, I know exactly how you're feeling. That would be an insult to the strong feelings passionately expressed in the poem. B-U-T just four days ago you wrote the poem of autumnal reverie I just finished writing about and you found all the words you needed to turn language into life. Forgive me if this sounds presumptuous, I don't intend that. As I was mulling over these two new poems, I clicked on both SUMMER RAIN from four years ago and SUNSHINE DARLING OF THE DIVINE from about a year ago, and was regaled with vivid language and startling visions. If you have lost touch - temporarily - to your source of words, rearrange the words of those two poems into new poems. Or better yet, let those two poems inspire your next one, because they are boundless.

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Leah Ayliffe 06 October 2015

It makes me so happy to come onto PH and find your comments! Yes, this poem is not very encouraging... I was just having a few foggy uninspired days. I am feeling much more refreshed today, I will look back to those poems you mentioned and see what happens in my mind! Thanks as always for your comments :)

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Kumarmani Mahakul 03 October 2015

I could scream the things that occupy my mind..so amazing endless expression of words is wisely observed here....10

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