When The Invaders Come Comments

Though this poem is something with different theme! i like your thoughts fellow 10+

the rhyme scheme and rythmic pulse in this poem are fantastic. i really enjoy this. i also enjoy yr tone and language. keep everything the way it is. changing some words to make it more grammatically correct would only make the poem to wordy and demean free self expression.

I really understood the protectiveness and loyalty behind this poem. Very good. However, I think the line 'Where when time comes I am in realism' should read 'When the time comes, I am in realism.' Other than that, I liked it.

This poem sounds like the ardent loyalty and fervor of a soldier and fighter.....I might consider using Whereas in the final line, , , , don't know..food for thought

I loved it its very good : D

Each words are matched perfectly with the idea... Well penned though... ^-^

Hey! I must say I think this is my 'New Best Poem of The Day' poem. I am really loving. Thanks soooooooo much for telling me to check it out. And keep 'em coming towards me. Love ya, Tiff.

a substantial write of being patriotic..well penned/rhymes...10

brilaintly written, well done!

i like this poem. Nice rhyme