When The Day Dawned Comments

The sun took over at noon, shadows crawled in the descending light, evening fell, A poem on beautiful description of dawn in its entirety.Well expressed Well done.I enjoyed it. Col Muhammad Khalid Khan

it's a beautiful poem, Rafiq, thanks for sharing...The last 2 lines make it all the more poignant and touching...

I would like very much to read more. That is if you have any more. I like this most. Well done!

Well expressed and aptly worded. You have talent and enough wherewithal to make innings. Go ahead.

We are indebted to Yasmin for translating your beautiful poem... of all the powerful lines my favorite is 'a long lost memory flowered in the heart' For the sake of all of us please keep writing

A beautiful haunting poem full of wonderful imagery creating an atmosphere of pending foreboding! Great write!

Different but good, you let the picture of what you were saying flow thru your oems well done. All the best in future

I really loved this. Sad but beautiful. The words you used just flow with the meaning of the poem!

Gr8 imagery. The serenity and silence of the early morning hours. Scary and lonely because there are very few people who are awake and at the same time very peaceful. Death described beautifully in the last four lines.10++

Amazing..! ! ! I was completely engrossed in your poetry until the end... speechless sir i am..! !

your poems have great sense with imagination and story.... amazing work that's the only thing i can say....

I was just stunned...and then I read it again n again n again...

Nice flow and growing narrative style to cast a great image for the day to dawn. Good piece of writing.

nice vivid write, a remarkable concept

'Don't pay the ferryman, until he gets you to the other side.' I think this is an insightful poem about life, and death. Not nice to think about, but its the only certainty we have... I still have so much to learn...

your descriptions are amazing, and it flows really well. i hope that you continue writing. i really enjoy your poems.

I fully agree with all of my fellow poets that commented on this talented write! A reservoir of powerful words and rich imagery! I take my hat off for you my friend! 10+++ Keep inspiring the World with your excellent and talented writes! Love and Peace for always! Romeo from New York City! ...

When the next day dawned, my house was draped in mourning..... The essence of these two lines dominates the total writing with the majestic beauty of silence which blot out our existence forever. Imagery like a successful movie by Kurosowa. Tranquil but moving without hampering our attention. Actually you have written silence under a shadow of melancholic trauma. Very powerful the pen, no pain it gives but we feel an end is nearing to a life......10+++++ Regards, pranab

WOW! ! ! +++++10 on your poetry. I was completely engrossed in your poetry until the end... each and everything like people and nature are described with amazing words and phrases... your poetry really shines

A poem of high and deep imagination came out from your heart, the journey of life narrated in such a beautiful way Excellent write - 10