I would say it excellent poem, till last line of the poem. The words repeated so many times doesn't bring much more meaning to the poem. If you repeated them a couple of times two three or four then added periods at the end like so... it would be sufficient, and make it much more readable. This is some friendly advice from someone who really liked your poem. So please don't take it wrong way.
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I would say it excellent poem, till last line of the poem. The words repeated so many times doesn't bring much more meaning to the poem. If you repeated them a couple of times two three or four then added periods at the end like so... it would be sufficient, and make it much more readable. This is some friendly advice from someone who really liked your poem. So please don't take it wrong way.