When Love's Not On Cue, Be Patient. Comments

..as I WAS SAYING..... I give this charming poem five (5) stars. ARE YOU SURE that I did not WRITE IT? ? ? ? ;) BRI

Asim, I think I've commented through stanza 7. BE PATIENT! ! ! ! 'IT' WILL HAPPEN. I may be days before my return, BUT I have read the whole poem, to my delight AND given it a 'BIG

(cont.) stanzas 4 + 5 + 6 ARE FAVORITES, ESPECIALLY AS A GROUP. GO lion! I AM 'ROOTING' ((aka 'WISHING SUCCESS')) for YOU! ! but, I WARN YOU, be kind and GENTLE with 'lioness'! ! ! : )

I DID send comments through ONLY stanza 3? stanza 4: 'encroach': (one definition) 'To advance beyond proper or former limits' THAT LION HAD BETTER BE CAREFUL! ! ! (cont.)

(cont.) NOTE DEFINITION # 1: 'rile rīl transitive verb 1-To anger or irritate. synonym: annoy.2 -To stir up (liquid) ; roil.3 -To render turbid or muddy; to stir up; to roil.'

I had ANOTHER laugh HERE: 'the lioness rolled her eyes, trying to hide' STANZA 3: I THINK it makes MORE sense for you to switch to 'don't make ME riled! ' *** (cont.)

This line made me laugh, NOT quietly: 'ready to woo his love with a romantic demand.' I don't think THAT would 'go over well' in this/my/'HER' household! !

line 4: Don't use 'was still very bore', but using 'boring' would dissolve the rhyme you WANT, so I suggest 'was still quite a bore'. I wonder if you wrote this years ago, but just now submitted it.

Oops, another LONG ONE, from the bottom of your poem list by Popularity. line 1 [not lion 1]: I don't know why 'Live'' is capitalied, but I THINK 'lived' IS proper, and 'enjoyed', not 'enjoy'; most verbs used are past tense in this.