hurricane Katrina is in town, and the tall walls
of New Orleans, the heart of jazz
and the center of carnivals so ancient
lost its word in history to the downpour
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It is hard to write about a tragedy and you have done it well. However, it would urge you to cut some of the lines. It seems, well, deep as the flood waters and too much. Your best stanza, and it is really marvelous, is the last one. It is nearly a poem in itself. You might think of starting there and having that be your poem. It is creative, unique, and powerful.
Raynette
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It is hard to write about a tragedy and you have done it well. However, it would urge you to cut some of the lines. It seems, well, deep as the flood waters and too much. Your best stanza, and it is really marvelous, is the last one. It is nearly a poem in itself. You might think of starting there and having that be your poem. It is creative, unique, and powerful. Raynette