Wednesday, December 12, 2007

When I Saw Her. Comments

Rating: 3.8

A boiling, hot summers day was when I saw her
she had lovely, straight, blonde hair
i couldn`t help but gaze a stare
her beautiful blue eyes lit up brightly in the sun
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Ricky Owen
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Ron Stock 16 April 2015

Concerning those last two lines O their brilliance, miracle of (George Oppen)

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Ron Stock 16 April 2015

As a dear old friend of mine would have said about those two last lines, Of their brilliance, miracle of

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Ron Stock 16 April 2015

Of your brilliance, miracle of

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Kim Barney 16 April 2015

Did you find out her name? Did you talk to her? If not, fat chance of having your dream come true, but I wish you the best. Congrats on Poem of the Day.!

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Brian Stafford 16 April 2015

Short and sweet, congrats and on getting poem of the day!

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Kelly Kurt 16 April 2015

A short but powerful poem of desire

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Bernard Snyder 16 April 2015

How sweet! Prayers are often answered. I hope this is one as such! Thanks for sharing and also...congrats on being chon as 'poem of the day'...well-deserved!

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Madathil Rajendran Nair 16 April 2015

Short and sweet. May the dreams become reality.

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Serenity Prayer 07 June 2008

cute poem. good job.

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A moment in time, screaming with possibilities, captured in verse.

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Linda Weischedel 20 January 2008

Great Poem Ricky. Love the adjectives you chose to use. Always, Linda

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Sylvi Sylva 06 January 2008

I pray she looks at you kindly - brilliant and pleasant reading. topten i say

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Shiza Khan 05 January 2008

hey ricky...ur poem is juss beautiful..well done.

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Wennie C 21 December 2007

God, i can even picture that girl! ! I love the way you describe that girl in your dream. Very well written

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Suicide King 16 December 2007

A great job of placing so much feeling in a very short amount of lines. great job

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Effie Yalena Steyn 14 December 2007

You deserve to get her. Nice writing, it flowed, held my attention. xx

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