When All Is Lost Comments

Qiniso, technically, this is a prose paragraph. Why not break it into lines so it's verse? The piece would work better if instead of larding it with abstractions (zeal, life, hope, faith, etc.) , you focused on images, on showing not telling. Maybe read some good contemporary poetry (Billy Collins, Mary Oliver) to improve? If you have time, check out my new website: jeffersoncarterverse.com Tell me how you like it, and, if you do, perhaps share it with interested friends? Thanks! Yrs, JC