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There are words in all your poems who need review so I hope you will do that for the sake of English but I want to talk about your rhymes. They are only fair at best. The structure you use is correct, but you don't get the most out of it. Basically, you are a work in progress. I normally don't say' keep writing' because that doesn't mean anything but in your case that is exactly what you need to do to improve. But do one thing specially. Write what you want to express in phrases not words. GW62