When.. Comments

I think the speaker is the writer, and the point is not being a 'total loser', but attachment to some dull job that provides security at a price. Not easy to walk away in a world where economic security is increasingly a rarity. So we get stuck. Of course there's more to it, I don't think i completely understand this, there may also be underlying depression. I rate it very good in a contest of low standard.

i'm sure i don't understand all that you meant to say, but for some reason your wording (at least some of it, like: As the cloud of grey is now the scent of my identity,) caused me to enjoy reading this. is the speaker (not you of course!) a total loser or 'just' a procrastinator? ? thanks for sharing.

The last two lines completed the wisdom thought in your poetry! great_Soul

A poem on human lethargy unquenchable nice one keep it up