What Do You Do? Comments

Bhavi Hi . . .

Yer now werds im gonna do when luv comes tur me? I sat down n juz enjoy it........

Your day will come, litle girl. Read my Bloom of Youth. Adeline

The shorter the poem, the greater or the lesser it will be. I prefer shorter poems, as do the readers. This is a lesser short poem. The alignment of phrses and words are critical here, and there is misalignment . There is nothing wrong with the format. In fact, it is probably the one I would have chosen or some form of it. It communicates and it is forceful. This subdues its weaknesses to some extent, but the problem is big and is not obscure. GW62

When you get the answer, let me know...perhaps there is no answer....Coach

Funny, I get the same ending. Wonderful poem, if not a little frenzied. X's and O's