What do they dream, my animals, safe
From the dampness outside this house
Tonight's rain sweeps in and out
Like a cowboy in the old west
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You have found a winning title/first line for your poem. It drew me immediately, and you develop it skillfully in that first stanza which focuses on animals. But the biggest surprise is the capitalized which describes the house's moral intent. So you not only enhance animal being but also building being. Everything is alive in this poem! And it's capped by the appeal to people to aid animals in need, so the life focus of the poem extends beyond one person's concern to the whole community. What largesse of sentiment runs through your poem!
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You have found a winning title/first line for your poem. It drew me immediately, and you develop it skillfully in that first stanza which focuses on animals. But the biggest surprise is the capitalized which describes the house's moral intent. So you not only enhance animal being but also building being. Everything is alive in this poem! And it's capped by the appeal to people to aid animals in need, so the life focus of the poem extends beyond one person's concern to the whole community. What largesse of sentiment runs through your poem!