Sunday, May 4, 2014

What Did I Do Wrong? Comments

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What did I do wrong?
We were, now we’re not
Don’t say the love is gone
Because I know it’s not
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Eugene Levich 04 May 2014

A top-of-the-line poem, Nicholas! But do correct the double negative: But I can’t take your lies no more. Change to either: But I can't take your lies any more. OR But I can take your lies no more. OR But I can't take your lies... No more! (And I really hope she stops lying to you!)

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