We Live In Consonance Comments

This poem in the mode of a dream takes us to a forest where birds and trees live in perfect consonance or harmony, where there are no melancholic notes. Being a dream, the scene shifts to a collection of water, a lake where fishes gambol merrily! But the dream vanishes and the narrator is brought back to a world of reality where he sees no consonance as earlier beheld in his dream. Very beautifully presented!

3 - rhyming is what i almost always do in my poems and it comes easily to me. you rhyme pretty well, but you may make yourself more understood (to me anyway) if you don't always rhyme. strive for understanding. if rhyming fits, use it. This is enough to say for this one poem. Bri :) NOW …...read one of my poems and leave a comment on it! ! ! ! ! ! !

2 - consonance: " noun agreement or compatibility between opinions or actions." (the main definition i found) i feel using " mutual" in front of " consonance" is not needed and may at times be redundant. maybe use " human consonance" ? ? ? i don't know what " achieving the lesson" means. do you mean " learning" the lesson? and what lesson do you refer to?

1 - i came back to look for poet's notes you said you added. i see none. use of " posterity" ? ? " noun all future generations of people. " the victims' names are recorded for posterity" synonyms: future generations, succeeding generations, those who come after us; the future " the names of those who died are recorded for posterity on a framed scroll" ARCHAIC the descendants of a person.

my favorite line: " In patches did sunlight creep to the ground, " i read the poem and plan to return another day to comment more. the effort to rhyme is obvious. do you write poetry in another language? ? bri :)

This is quite touching and amazing When vision, dreams, and trance present us with a pleasant life than what we have at hand. I do relate to this practically. Nice job