Was That You? Comments

This has a good feel to it (fix typo in line 4) . I don't think that you needed to bring God into the last line. I think the readers would understand. But that aside, I like the idea behind this and, in particular, the rhyme scheme. the rhymes are obvious but that is not a problem as they are stated in a less obvious fashion. I think that your grammer in this, whilst not 'proper', is what makes the poem stand out. You are, obviously, working with a second language and you put that to good use.