Sunday, July 10, 2011

War, The Plight Of Man Comments

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The fires of war are burning, they burn forever bright
The horns of war are blowing, they summon warriors to fight
Two armies come to battle, a clash of sword and shield
And when the fight is over, blood and death shall coat the field
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Tim Vallie
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Bri Edwards 14 June 2013

i like rhyming. i almost found 'fault' for you using fight at the end of three lines; that would have been petty. besides, the rhymes are good and FIGHT is an important part of the poem. i do see three spelling errors. i will tell you what they are if you don't know and want to know. thanks for sharing. well done.

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