Wanting You Dead? Comments

This is a very interesting and well expressed poem, Linda, one contains some beautifully written verses in it. The narrator is sounding like she wants to kill a lover she fantasized about but never actually had in the literal sense. In that last line, I think it would be more effective and better capture what you wanted to say, by rephrasing it thus: 'Would I have truly been good for you? ' It seems to fit better with the preceeding line of the final verse. Ending such a poem with a question is sometimes better than making a statement like you did. Carl.

Love sure does twist the mind apart