Wallace Stevens: The Click Of Marbled Orbs Comments

I happen to be a reader unfamiliar with the work of Wallace Stevens, but I like William F. Dougherty's poem nonetheless. The first four lines are tight and descriptive. - glassblown nouns - terrific! ! My primary takeaway from this sonnet is Mr. Dougherty's admiration for Wallace Stevens; it genuinely comes across.

Nice poem. Sounds more of ancient lines. I like it.

Like this, note you use the Shakespearian form and end on a couplet, not a Petrachian sonnet rhyme scheme. Good write

.....a wonderful write for member poem of the day....excellent rhyming...and a pleasure to read...

1) concrete refers to standard term for imagery as specific, not to hardness. 2) Line # scansion depends on pronunciation of hardening-commonly sounded as two syllables and keeping the line in iambic pentameter. 3) If scanned as three syllables you have iamb/anapest/iamb/iamb/iamb, a permissible and commonly used substituion, which see. Appreciate your close attention and metrical know-how.

This sonnet works well and to good point save line-10 which breaks rhythm and should not end with into concrete having begun with Of hardening but instead with some other -eat rhyme.

This is a very beautiful poem with a very tender rhythm. I am loving the vivid description of the narration. Thank you for sharing. ~Besa

Brilliant tribute to the great bard of CT. Not a word out of place, not a rhythm gone awry. Captures the dexterity which characterizes Stevens. I am humbled and in awe.

Rhyming diction is unique with the flavor of picturising the reality. The form may be conventional, but the content keeps foot to the contemporary dailiness. Classic its general appearance but existing reality is its heart. So its create an interest to read it again.

Recognize this sonnet's use of allusions as tribute to Stevens anthologized poems-especially trombones, sausage makers, cattle skulls and pettifogging buds. Footnotes might clarify the allusions for readers not familiar with Stevens elegant stye.